What's new in my paragraph: I added the second reason as to how Prism's three volume novel fits into the thesis. I also reworded the top few sentences a little so they made more sense.
How Buddies can help: If you could look it over and make sure it actually flows that would be great! I've been really time tight lately and the only times I've had to type is like nine to eleven at night so I probably swerved off the road every once in a while. Haha, as long as everything makes sense that's cool. Plus, if you have any ideas on how I can add-on better to the paragraph please say so. Thanks!
A third character that’s symbolized in Wilde’s play would be Miss Prism. Prism is constantly lacking motivation. Full of neglect, she is satisfied with even her own unfinished work. When her three volume novel is lost, Miss Prism just shrugs her shoulders and waves away her wasted hours of unnecessary work. When telling of this latest occupation, she clearly states, “The manuscript unfortunately was abandoned. I use the word in the sense of lost or mislaid.” (Wilde 39)The matter is just wiped aside! The carelessness of losing the book can be looked upon as unlucky, but being so lazy to not even look for it shows it really meant nothing to her in the first place. It seems that finding the three volume novel would be worth your time, especially sense it might sell for a good amount of money. This book in a way also represents Miss Prism and her life. Being in the upper class, Prism has the advantage of knowledge and knowledge is power. Lower classes in the Victorian Era rarely and usually never had the opportunity of gaining such intelligence. Prism becomes the governess of Cecily and tries to teach her many things, but gives in when all that’s needed is the final step of enforcement. At one point, Prism tells Cecily to do her work but Chasuble comes along and Cecily insists that Miss Prism leaves. Instead of asking Chasuble to sit with them while she looks over Cecily and her work, Prism gives in and leaves Cecily to walk with him. The three volume novel is just a way of pointing this out. Prism spends time writing the tale to be published, but when she suddenly loses her work she sits back and pretty much says, “Well that’s too bad.” In this way, the three volume novel is just a written replica of Prism’s life reactions.
How Buddies can help: If you could look it over and make sure it actually flows that would be great! I've been really time tight lately and the only times I've had to type is like nine to eleven at night so I probably swerved off the road every once in a while. Haha, as long as everything makes sense that's cool. Plus, if you have any ideas on how I can add-on better to the paragraph please say so. Thanks!
A third character that’s symbolized in Wilde’s play would be Miss Prism. Prism is constantly lacking motivation. Full of neglect, she is satisfied with even her own unfinished work. When her three volume novel is lost, Miss Prism just shrugs her shoulders and waves away her wasted hours of unnecessary work. When telling of this latest occupation, she clearly states, “The manuscript unfortunately was abandoned. I use the word in the sense of lost or mislaid.” (Wilde 39)The matter is just wiped aside! The carelessness of losing the book can be looked upon as unlucky, but being so lazy to not even look for it shows it really meant nothing to her in the first place. It seems that finding the three volume novel would be worth your time, especially sense it might sell for a good amount of money. This book in a way also represents Miss Prism and her life. Being in the upper class, Prism has the advantage of knowledge and knowledge is power. Lower classes in the Victorian Era rarely and usually never had the opportunity of gaining such intelligence. Prism becomes the governess of Cecily and tries to teach her many things, but gives in when all that’s needed is the final step of enforcement. At one point, Prism tells Cecily to do her work but Chasuble comes along and Cecily insists that Miss Prism leaves. Instead of asking Chasuble to sit with them while she looks over Cecily and her work, Prism gives in and leaves Cecily to walk with him. The three volume novel is just a way of pointing this out. Prism spends time writing the tale to be published, but when she suddenly loses her work she sits back and pretty much says, “Well that’s too bad.” In this way, the three volume novel is just a written replica of Prism’s life reactions.
It flows quite well and i like your writing style. I could not find a second concrete detail so maybe try to label it or directly introducing it. Other than that fact your paragraph is quite wonderful.
ReplyDeleteVert nice! Maybe you could add a hook at the beginning of the paragrah.
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